Vignettes is a writing exercise in flow. I write a story in scenes that I think of sequentially. Then I analyze them for how well they read, what problems they have, etc.
Then, hopefully, I can revise the chapters and rewrite it into an exciting short piece of fiction.
This piece was written to revise, so feel free to comment.
Things to look for.
Does it convey mood. Does it pull you along. Do you feel emotions. Is it clear and understandable. Is the dialog real and compelling. Does the situation seem possible or believable. Do you care for the characters.
Room for two